Feedback for Unexpected Fatherhood by misschris

[danielle]

Please post your thoughts on this story by replying to this thread.

[kenobiamidala]

AWE!!!!! he was able to save her and she could be with her children awe!!! beautiful work Obi Wan, this was so well written and emotional well done!!

[fkelleher]

A bare chested Obi wan holding my baby would certainly give me the will to live ! Nice continuity from movie . You know he loves her if he's asking Yoda to help him ! Good story,really good.

[danielle]

Pleased that it saves Padmé from death.

Good excuse to get Obi-Wan to take his shirt off!

Plausible explanation for her struggle concerning Palpy's dark force powers draining her and the bond with Anakin.

I loved it!

[NoobianRose]

Oh my gosh! I was so into this! It went by so fast. You nailed these characters so beautifully. I could see everything as it happened. I was particularly excited by this:

"Exploiting the bond Sideous is. Draining her life Force by the Dark Side he is," said Yoda. Obi-Wan nodded, having sensed the bond in her too. This explained why the med droids could not find the reason she was dying. Her Living Force was slipping away by malevolent means. With both husband and wife fighting for their lives, this was another crucial battle between the Light and the Dark Side of the Force."

It was the perfect explanation as to why Padme died on that table. It wasn't because she was weak or broken-hearted. But because Sidious knew her importance. Even though Anakin used her life as a justification for turning to the Dark Side, he could never truly become Darth Vader with her -- alive -- still tying him to his life as Jedi Knight Anakin Skywalker.

In that quote? You gave Padme her power back. And I thank you for that.

Can I assume that because this was listed as "Chapter 1" that we might be able to expect more?? >_>

[misschris]

Thanks everyone, glad you liked it. I'm amused by the shirtless Obi-Wan comments - I was intending to add some reality into pregnancy/giving birth and skin to skin is a lovely experience. So barechested Obi-Wan is a bonus! Yes, this is the start of a series on Obi-Wan helping Padmé raise Luke and Leia so stay tuned...

[Briseis]

This is so beautiful!! If only this actually happened. It was written so brilliantly that I could really see this happening, your characterisation was so on-point. I loved your explanation for why Padmé was dying, I completely believe in that theory, bloody Palpy. And shirtless Obi, hello Of course, there's a legitimate reason for that, but still fun. Yay, I can't wait for the continuation of this <3